Nice song :D
Ill review as I go
The first 20 seconds, seems very irrelevant to me, nicely done, but irrelevant. :D
I'm liking the melody (simple), good for an intro :D The intro first lead my need less delay.
Ok the kick needs a lot of work, more overdrive and more layers of eq and distort will do it some good. At the moment there's to much sub bass, not enough punch or kick.
At 1 minute, I'm not really sure of that new lead that's introduced, it detracts from the song.
1:26 you may need to take off the heavy reverb on those claps, the track is becoming a little bit too cloudy, with the kick having so much sub bass and all.
1:40 You need to work on transitions :D reverse effects, snare rolls. Anything to stop those transitions from sounding so sudden.
2:15 the kick should stop here, it should go into a build up/climax with an epic melody. This is hardstyle after all. But it ain't here. :(
2.40 This sounds kinda like what I was on about :D but there should be a break down and a build up from the intro sounds into the melody.
Well your main melody needs to be longer and less complicated, at the moment its a little confusing, and it would be hard to dance to this. (To many different rhythms).
4.05 The breath is a nice touch, it could do with quieter though
4.38 again no transition. It is all a little to sudden
All in all, I'd say there's to many melodies dotted around the place. The leads are not different enough from the intro, to the main section, to the outro, and there is no clear break downs, so it is unclear where the different sections :D
This is all constructive criticism, this is a good try since you've only started producing this year :D
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